One day a security guard was walking through the prison on
the way to his office. On his way, one of the inmates pleaded with the guard to
let him go outside because he really wanted to go outside since the weather was
so nice. The security guard questioned whether he should let the inmate out,
and he decided not to. He told the inmate that he wasn’t allowed to go outside
at that time. The inmate begged and begged, and the security guard finally
conceded on the condition that the inmate wouldn’t cause any trouble. The
inmate agreed and was obviously excited to go outside.
The security guard opens the door and lets the inmate out.
In the blink of an eye, the inmate pulls out a shank and puts it to the guard’s
neck. The security guard was scared for his life and cried out for mercy. He
was so confused as to why the inmate would pull such a cruel trick since the
guard had helped him out. He pleaded his case to the inmate, so the inmate
mockingly asked other inmates about what he should do. First he asked an inmate
who was imprisoned on drug charges. The first inmate said the security guard
earned it because he trusted the inmate which was obviously foolish. The next
inmate was in prison for murder. He said he wished he had thought of the idea
because he still had a thirst for blood. The final prisoner was a drunk driver
who accidentally killed the driver of an oncoming car. He said nothing and was
mournful because the situation took him back to the fact he had killed that
innocent driver.
Just as the inmate was about to harm the guard, a nurse
entered the room as it was time to for the inmates to receive their yearly flu
shot. She immediately realized what was happening and acted to defuse the
situation. The inmate threatened her but
she acted quickly. In a deceptive way, she informed the inmate that his current
form would not kill the guard, just severely injure him. The inmate was
displeased because he was an angry man and sought the death of the guard. He
implored the nurse to show him exactly how to do the vicious deed. She
approached slowly with her hands at her side. She grabbed the inmates arm with
her right hand, and she secretively slipped her left hand into her pocket. In a
flash she pulled out a syringe and stuck the inmate in the back of his chest.
He did not know that the nurse was armed with an instant tranquilizer in case
of an emergency situation with the inmates. The prisoner instantly tensed up
and the guard slipped away. More security arrived and the prisoner was
sentenced to a life sentence beyond his current sentence.
(A prison guard standing next to a door - Express.co.uk) |
I took this plot from the short story about The Brahman, The Jackal, and The Tiger. The story line is very similar and can be found in my reading notes. The security guard represents the Brahman, the inmate is the Tiger, and the Nurse is the Jackal. Obviously the story I told is quite a bit different, but it follows a similar plot. My story includes the release of the prisoner which is related to the Brahman releasing the Tiger. The inmate then asks the opinions of the other inmates, which is related to the Brahman asking opinions of the tree, the buffalo, and the road. And the nurse steps in to save the day; much like the jackal did for the Brahman.
Bibliography
Indian Fairy Tales by Joseph Jacobs with illustrations by John Batten
Hi Brady,
ReplyDeleteI thought this story was a really interesting take on the original story. You can still see the basic plot of the story with the villain, the protagonist, the three people he questions, and the hero. I really like how modernized the story was. You really got the same basic moral to the story but the setting and characters were completely different. I thought it was cool how you took the magic elements out of the story, something I think is hard to do. Good luck with the rest of the semester!
Thanks for the comments Meghan,
DeleteGood luck to you as well!
-Brady
Hi Brady!
ReplyDeleteLike Meghan said, I also really liked how successfully you were able to translate the original story into modern times. It was also really intense! Even though I knew roughly how the story was going to turn out after reading the original, I still felt nervous for the nurse and the guard haha. One thing I wondered was if you considered why the inmate believed the nurse when she said that his form was incorrect and she could show him proper form? I assume it's probably because of her medical knowledge, but maybe you could mention that in the story quickly or even add a little bit more dialogue to explain another reason why. Maybe the nurse previously treated a patient who was injured in a similar way, or the nurse was a medical technician in the army. Your story reads really well without it and everything is clear, but that's just a suggestion if you ever wanted to revisit it and add some more details. Great job!
Hi Brady,
ReplyDeleteWow I am so glad that I had a chance to read your story. I think you did a great job of taking the original story and making it your own with a modern twist. You did an excellent job making the characters and story your own, while still paying tribute to the original. Overall, this was a very fun read.
Great job.
-Andy
Hey, Brady!
ReplyDeleteYou've got a really interesting twist on the original story here -- setting things in modern circumstances can make literature much more engaging and accessible to readers. Nice work keeping close enough to the original story that I could always pick out the plot parallels. Also, what good timing from the nurse and what luck to be prepared! Tranquilizer ex machina came in clutch.
Interesting take on this story! Is the setting McAlester based? I like how you've stuck with the basic structure and elements of the original but changed the setting enough that it feels like a new story.
ReplyDeleteThe way you've divided the story into paragraphs makes it very readable, and I thought the details about the other prisoners' thoughts gave it some depth.
Hi Brady!
ReplyDeleteI chose to read your story because of how intriguing the title was. I was in for quite a wild ride! I love how much details you out into the thought process of the prison inmate. I really enjoyed the fact that you allowed the readers to take a look into the minds of the prison inmates and see a little about what they are thinking. The story in and of itself is very creative, especially considering how far removed it is from the original. I enjoyed the setting of the story and think the idea of placing the story inside of a prison was very interesting and effective. I also really like the cunning ways of the nurse. I wonder what would have happened had she not walked outside in time or even not known what to do or say once she saw what was going on. Nevertheless, the story is a very easy read and I really, really enjoyed!
Brady,
ReplyDeleteNice story! I have not read the original story, but your retelling of it makes me curious as to how that one went down! I appreciate the more modern approach you took in relating to our prison system. I'm not sure how much of a coincidence it was for their nurse to come in at just the right time and with something they only need once a year, but it still seemed probable enough to not take away from the story.
Good work, and best of luck with your future writing.
-Lance J.